Wednesday, April 30, 2008

Need your input please...

I did this piece awhile back and I'm not sure what I think of it. The theme of the piece is near and dear to my heart since it's one of my daughter and my favorite things to do so I am just wondering if that is clouding my judgement as to whether the piece is strong enough or not or where I could improve it.

Ok, I'm asking for honest opinions here guys...so don't just be nice.


5 comments:

roz said...

HI Phyllis,
This is darling. Love the color palette and nighttime theme.
My first impression was really just to move kids up higher into the scene toward the trees. They feel too close to the bottom of the page for me.
Possibly the kids and blanket could be turned to the left slightly (Top left, bottom going right) but I think that is just me liking angles.
Anyway, very very cute.

Anthony VanArsdale said...

Hi Phyllis... I love this picture! looking at the stars is something I loved best as a child... I think I'll do it tonight!

I think you could make very subtle changes... if you darken the
background of the farm and trees it might push it back... i like the kids where they are because it gives that sense of openness above, that you get when looking at the stars...(that's one of my favorite things)

and maybe make the night really starry... it will help frame the point of interest, because your eyes will focus on the color of the children and pets

again, I like it very much... makes me smile :)

Kate said...

Hhhhmmmm...I see what you mean. I feel it is lacking "something", but I am not sure what. To me, it feels like just a picture. Like....it is NICE, but ....maybe just not taken as far as you could have taken it to make it more interesting or noteable. I agree, the background needs to be pushed into the background with maybe darker and cooler colors. The cat is distracting to me...there is not a lot of flow for my eyes because the girl blends in a little too much with the quilt...and so does the dog. The illustrations feels a little "divided" by the horizontal lines to me. Maybe make the fence BROWN? That would put the focus back on the kids in the foreground and break up so much of the horizontal feeling. The girl is pointing upward, and the barn is right above her...I think moving the bard way over to the right would help to balance oout the composition...maybe even with a light on in the window to help my eye flow around the illustration. I hope that helps. I know you are atteched to the subject matter. i just think it needs a little "oomph". Hope something I said is helpful.

Phyllis Harris said...

Thank you to all that took the time to help me out. All your comments were very helpful!

One Sided said...

I love the emotion the picture brings. The canges of darker sky, more stars, I coluld see being used to help express a span of time.